Tuesday, January 22, 2013

A story for class



Had to write a short story for class. These were the instructions and under that is my story. Annnd go!

Create an imaginary person you want to write to in your journal. Alternately, it could be a real person, such as a child or a friend from grade school. Start the entry "Dear ___" as if you were writing that person a letter. Include face and hair details, eyes, body shape and size, and special characteristics, such as a cough or a limp. Put the person in action. You will be graded on the vividness of the detail and action. Detail! Detail!


Dear Helena,

I’m writing to you because I have news to share. While I was out in the stables cleaning up the hay I noticed someone approaching the barn from way off in the distance. It was a man walking with a crooked leg that gave him a deep limp with each step. As he came closer and closer I realize he vaguely reminded me of someone that I used to know. John has returned to us from war!

Truly, I thought I’d never see him again. I know that there has been quite a bit of time that has passed since we last received word from him. I was sure that he had perished but much to my enjoyment he has returned. His body is badly worn and decayed but I don’t think it’s anything a lot of rest won’t fix but we must be patient as his healing process will take some time.

His once fair skin has turned to ash, the strings of bright blonde hair are full of the earth, his bright blue eyes appear to be gray, and his strong structure seemed weakened due to malnourishment. He tells me they were without food for quite some time while out on the battle fields. I’m sure you’re wondering where the deep limp has come from. He won’t say anything other than he his platoon was hit with a canon. In fact, he’s not saying much at all. I sometimes wonder if he’s okay mentally. This was a tough battle but I’ll take him any way I can get him.

He asked about you. He had hoped you would return home after your trip to the cape but I told him you have not given an expected return date because you have found work and friends there. He’s in too delicate of a state for us to tell him that you fell victim to yellow fever. When he is healed I will show him the box of letters that I have written to you and keep close to my heart for safe keeping. I will explain to him that other than you watching us from above the letters are now the only way we can communicate. I hope you are resting in peace.


Love,

Kate

6 comments:

  1. Amazing job babe.

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  2. OMG Feak'n amazing. If you don't get an A I will be shocked!

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  3. Thanks guys! I appreciate your comments here. The only thing that sucks is that I can't see who's saying what because it has you down as anonymous.

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  4. its to keep you guessing

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  5. Hehehe! The suspense is killing me! Oh, and I did get an A!

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